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Dikt 2

Last post 11-05-2011, 3:13 by Datsieh. 2 replies.


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08-24-2005, 3:36 38

viking4you
Joined on 08-24-2005

Dikt 2

Could you learn to love me

Could you learn to love me
could you learn to care?
Would you say I love you
would you even dare?

Could you learn my worries
and happiness too?
Could you learn about me
the way I learns about you?

Could you learn to kiss me
kiss me without a doubt?
Could you learn of love
and what it’s all about?

Could you learn to say,
the sweetest things I wish to hear?
Would you maybe whisper it
slowly in my ear?

Would you maybe love me
if I was unknown to you?
Could you love a stranger
the way that I do?

Could you?

Asle

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11-28-2005, 8:49 114 in reply to 38

Inger-Johanne
Joined on 11-26-2005
Stavanger

Re: Dikt 2

stiligt. du e flinke. litt små pirl i learn isje i learns. ellers veldig bra.:)

Lev live mens du kan, det komme isje i reprise.
Det e bedre å angra på den enn jor enn det enn isje jor.

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11-05-2011, 3:13 7577 in reply to 38

Datsieh
Joined on 10-30-2011

Re: Dikt 2

Ser at dette er gammelt, men pytt la gå. Jeg likte diktet ditt! Men setningen "could you learn my worries and happiness too" må gjøres noe med. Og som nevnt tidligere her learn/learns. Likte særlig godt siste vers :)

"Reason is intuition's servant"

(A. Einstein)

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